Well , Artificial has made his valid point - Your review feels a bit too biased.
Comparison of games is good if done in a friendly way , as Artificial had said , not everyone would feel the same as
you. Not all games have an altering storyline , or rather , not a lot of them have such a feature and you can't
really expect one franchise to be as good as the other for they have their own unique flavours.
Also , your over-relying on comparison between the various RPG franchises , not all have played the original Final
Fantasy VII , not all have played Knights of the NIghtmare , not all have played Final Fantasy : Tactics and not all
have played Shin Megami Tensei : Devil Survivor. It is for the best if you made your own points and description , the
readers aren't going to bother checking out on the series they have no intention of playing just to make this
review form a perfect formula in their mind.
Also , not many games allow the players to have an altering storyline. Such games , at the very minimal , may perhaps
have a Dating SIM feature , featuring the character ending up with various heroes or heroines like in Sakura Wars : So
long my Love , Shin Megami Tensei , Rune Factory , Agarest : Generations of War whilst others may feature actual
deviations in the storyline like Hoshigami , but most games does not offer such a feature , so it's not prudent to
slam something just because it does not offer such a feature within it's franchise. For one , most of the Final
Fantasy games doesn't even offer such a feature.
Though there are certainly valid points found within the review , the tone of the review and the fact that you've
allowed your personal thoughts to sway it so have turned the review into something of a slam more than an actual
review.
Like I said , you did make your mark here and there , but it is also marred by expecting it to be as good as the other
franchises , not everyone would have the same views as you and the offensive comments may offend... well , fans of the
series you have mentioned.
Keep the offensive tone at bay , the comparison to a minimal and make the review more enjoyable as a whole , as well as
greater elaboration of the storyline , graphical setting , music setting and you would get yourself a freshly baked
review of great enjoyability =w=